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Is the following sentence perfectly normal/OK?

A system was developed to integrate the internet and cell phones under the SuperSpeed framework by generalizing XCP-IP under the X-Transmission framework.

Does the usage of under sound repetitive here? Would it bother you at all -- if 'under' is appropriate in each case? If it still does, how much (ASSUMING there is another way to rewrite the first part of the sentence to get rid of the first under -- then how much would you be bothered by this suboptimal sentence structure? )?

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  • Please don't post the same question here and on ELU.
    – Davo
    Commented Dec 11, 2017 at 19:20
  • Not familiar with the tech being discussed, but would "using xxx protocol/framework" work for either portion? There is clearly a difference, and the English definitions aren't the problem: "developing xxx application using the ZZZ framework" vs "integrating two different technologies under the (new) YYY protocol" are talking about different kinds of things.
    – BradC
    Commented Dec 11, 2017 at 19:49
  • using is not very appropriate for either one of them.
    – Dandksl
    Commented Dec 11, 2017 at 20:30
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    Ok, then stick with what you've got. In technical writing, technical precision trumps broad English guidelines about repeating words. (See, I used technical twice! And both were necessary!)
    – BradC
    Commented Dec 11, 2017 at 20:41
  • but say there is another way to rewrite the first part of the sentence to get rid of the first under -- then how much would you be bothered by this suboptimal sentence structure? '
    – Dandksl
    Commented Dec 11, 2017 at 20:48

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When writing about technical topics, repetitive language is a virtue, not a fault. Is each use of the word under individually the best word for the intended meaning at that point in the sentence? If so, then use under as many times as you need to. If not, use word(s) that convey the intended meaning more clearly.

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  • yes, each use is appropriate for the respective context in each part of the sentence.
    – Dandksl
    Commented Dec 11, 2017 at 19:28
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A better alternative to under the ... framework is within the ... framework.

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